You will learn
- Say what revising is.
- Add details.
- Replace weak words.
- Fix the order of ideas.
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Student lesson
- Revise means to improve.
- Reread your writing.
- Add details and stronger words.
- Check the order.
Words to know
change to improve
a first version of writing
an exact, lively word
read again
1. Discover: Improving the draft
Tolu’s draft: I went to the park. It was fun. His teacher says, “Tell me more!” Tolu revises: On Saturday I raced to the park with my brother. We climbed the tall slide and laughed loudly. It was the best day.
Think: What did Tolu change?
2. Understand: Revising
Idea 1: Draft and revise
A draft is a first version. To revise is to change it to make it better.
Idea 2: Add and replace
Add details, replace weak words with strong words (went to raced) and cut what does not fit.
Idea 3: Check order
Reread your writing. Does it make sense? Are the ideas in order? Ask a friend to read it too.
3. Worked examples
Example 1 (I show you): Add
Add detail to: I went to the park.
- When? With whom?
Answer: On Saturday I went to the park with my brother.
Example 2 (We do it together): Replace
Replace went with a stronger word.
- A lively word.
Answer: raced
Example 3 (You try): Check
Do you check order when revising?
Show the steps and answer
- Reread.
Answer: yes
Did you know?
Famous authors write many drafts before their book is finished.
Why this matters
Revising makes your writing clearer and more interesting.
4. Explore: Revise a draft
Improve a draft.
- Reread your draft.
- Add two details.
- Replace two weak words.
- Read the new version.
Think about it: what did you notice?
You can revise.
5. Practise
Say it in a sentence
Use these starters when you talk about the lesson. Say them out loud.
- I reread my ___.
- I added ___.
- I replaced ___ with ___.
- My writing is now ___.
Guided practice
Question 1. What is a draft?
a first version
Question 2. What does revise mean?
improve
Question 3. Replace went.
raced
Independent practice
Level 1: Start
- To change to improve is to ___.
- A first version is a ___.
- To read again is to ___.
- An exact lively word is a ___ word.
- We add ___.
Level 2: Grow
- Add detail: It was fun.
- Replace nice.
- Replace said.
Level 3: Stretch
- Why revise?
- Is the first draft perfect?
- Who can help?
Answers are in the answer key below. Try first, then check.
6. Apply: English in everyday life
Revise a short piece of your own writing.
Show a sample answer
a revised piece
Another one. Write a draft and a revised version.
Show a sample answer
two versions
7. Common mistakes
Fix: Reread.
Fix: Improve, do not start over.
8. Lesson summary and revision card
- I can say what revising is.
- I can add details.
- I can replace weak words.
- I can check order.
9. Check and master
Answer all 14 questions. You will see feedback after each one.
Your result appears here after you answer every question.
10. Key takeaways
- A draft is a first version.
- Revise to improve.
- Add details and strong words.
- Check order.
11. Next lesson
Next lesson: Editing spelling and punctuation. Keep going with the next idea in this course.
Exam practice
These questions are written in the style of common school and international primary assessments. Try them on your own, without looking back. Then check your answers in the marking guide. The marks are shown in brackets.
- What is a draft? [1 mark]
- What does revise mean? [1 mark]
- Replace went and nice with stronger words. [2 marks]
- Name one thing to check when revising. [1 mark]
- Explain how to revise writing. [3 marks]
Total: 8 marks.
Marking guide and model answers
- a first version of writing [1]
- change to improve [1]
- raced [1]; wonderful [1]
- order/details/words [1]
- reread [1]; add details and strong words [1]; check order [1]
Score guide: 7 to 8 = secure. 5 to 6 = nearly there, revise the parts you missed. Under 5 = work through the lesson again with a grown-up.
Printable worksheet
- To improve is to ___.
- A first version is a ___.
- To read again is to ___.
- A lively word is a ___ word.
- We add ___.
- True or false: the first draft is perfect.
- True or false: revising improves writing.
- Replace went.
- Add detail: I ate.
- Revise one sentence.
Homework
Revise a short piece of your own writing.
Answer key and marking scheme
| Question | Expected response | Marks |
|---|---|---|
| 1. To improve is to ___. | revise | 1 |
| 2. A first version is a ___. | draft | 1 |
| 3. To read again is to ___. | reread | 1 |
| 4. A lively word is a ___ word. | strong | 1 |
| 5. We add ___. | details | 1 |
| 6. True or false: the first draft is perfect. | false | 1 |
| 7. True or false: revising improves writing. | true | 1 |
| 8. Replace went. | raced | 1 |
| 9. Add detail: I ate. | I ate rice and beans. | 1 |
| 10. Revise one sentence. | a better sentence | 1 |
| Total | 10 |
Independent practice answers. Level 1: 1 revise; 2 draft; 3 reread; 4 strong; 5 details. Level 2: 1 It was fun because we laughed loudly.; 2 wonderful; 3 shouted. Level 3: 1 to improve; 2 no; 3 a friend.
Quiz answers: 1 B, 2 C, 3 A, 4 B, 5 C, 6 A, 7 B, 8 C, 9 A, 10 B, 11 C, 12 A, Challenge 1 B, Challenge 2 C.
Mastery and remediation
| Objective | Bronze (Developing) | Silver (Proficient) | Gold (Advanced) |
|---|---|---|---|
| O1 Say what revising is | Shows this with help from an adult or a picture | Does this independently and explains how they know | Explains it clearly and uses it in a new situation |
| O2 Add details | Shows this with help from an adult or a picture | Does this independently and explains how they know | Explains it clearly and uses it in a new situation |
| O3 Replace weak words | Shows this with help from an adult or a picture | Does this independently and explains how they know | Explains it clearly and uses it in a new situation |
| O4 Fix the order of ideas | Shows this with help from an adult or a picture | Does this independently and explains how they know | Explains it clearly and uses it in a new situation |
Courseversity badge thresholds (overall quiz score): Gold = 90–100%; Silver = 80–89.9%; Bronze = 70–79.9%. A badge is never a full record of progress.
If a learner struggles
- Find the misconception: Never rereading. Reread.
- Explain another way: use real objects, pictures or actions first, then words.
- Show a simpler example: Use a revising checklist.
- Guided practice: work through one example together and let the learner try the next one.
- Reassess: use the quiz again or the worksheet.
- Move on when the learner shows Silver-level evidence independently.
For parents and guardians
In this lesson your child learns to revise their writing. You do not need to be an expert to help.
- Read their draft.
- Ask: Tell me more.
- Praise revision.
- Ask “how do you know?” after each answer, and listen.
- Praise effort, not only right answers. Mistakes are how we learn.
- Ten to fifteen minutes a day is better than one long session.
Teacher package
1–5. Objectives, prerequisites, materials, preparation, duration
Lesson objectives. Learners will: say what revising is; add details; replace weak words; fix the order of ideas.
Prerequisite knowledge. Simple explanations.
Materials. Chart paper or board, pencils, picture or word cards, a reading book if available. Low-resource options: use chalk or charcoal on a board or wall, drawings in the sand, and objects from the classroom instead of printed materials.
Preparation. Write the key words and examples on the board or on cards before the lesson.
Suggested duration. 45–60 minutes. It can be split into two shorter sessions.
6–9. Teaching procedure, explanation notes, guided and independent activities
Introduction (5 min). Model revising.
Explanation (10 min). Teach adding and replacing.
Guided activity (10 min). Practise.
Independent activity (10 min). Share.
Assessment and reflection (5 min). Ask each learner to say one thing they learned and how they know it.
Key questions. Can I add detail? Can I use a stronger word?
Teacher explanation notes. Move from the spoken word to pictures and then to print. Read aloud often, point to the words, and let learners hear and say before they read and write.
10–12. Differentiation, formative assessment, common misconceptions
Support. Use a checklist. Extension. Revise with a partner.
Formative assessment. Listen to learners read and explain, ask “how do you know?”, and check the independent work.
Misconceptions. Never rereading. Reread.
13–15. Assessment questions, answer keys, marking scheme
Use the quiz, the 8-mark exam practice and the worksheet on this page. All answers and marking guides are in the answer sections above. Re-check every answer before use.
16–19. Remediation, enrichment, homework, teacher reflection
Remediation. Use a revising checklist. Enrichment. Revise a longer piece. Homework. See above.
Teacher reflection. After teaching, record: which ideas learners understood; which misconceptions occurred; which activities worked; which learners need more practice; and what to improve next time.
Sources and standards
This lesson is based on the sources below, and no official endorsement is claimed. Reference starting points: Common Core State Standards for English Language Arts, Cambridge Primary and the IB Primary Years Programme. Where a standard code is named, it points to the official framework.
Official standards for this topic area. Common Core State Standards for English Language Arts (official site): Grade 2 » Writing; Grade 2 » Language. These pages list the standards that cover this topic area; read them alongside the lesson.
Research used to shape this lesson. Common Core W.2.5 (focus on a topic and strengthen writing as needed by revising and editing); EEF Improving Literacy in Key Stage 1 (writing: revising); Cambridge Primary English Stage 2 (writing). These sources informed the lesson.